Rhetorical Analysis Score 9

okay so I am excited today to feature a student essay because this made a nine and this is by my student this year and I’m in the year 2016 27 2017 but my student this year but Varanasi Dube and one of my favorite memories of our own Ali is that she was consistently making aids to my class but she wasn’t satisfied with aids her thing was how can I make a nine and she came up and asked me that and I honestly didn’t feel like I could give her an adequate response because it’s really hard to explain what it takes to make it nine so that’s one thing I’ve been kind of working on this year what’s the difference between an eight and a nine how can you bump an eight to a nine so I did have a discussion with bar Nelly about that and magically it did work she started going to nines and she has consistently made nines she’s probably made more nines than any student I’ve ever taught so she’s consistently taken the aides to the nines which to me is a truly amazing thing so she’s a definitely a gifted thinker and writer that’s why I’m calling her a student expert and I would like to feature her essay today now you’ve already seen an eighth version of this which I wrote I want to show you what Baron Ollie did because I think a lot of you are going to be able to do this with the right kind of practice and some of you have already used extensively fours in your writing but the thing is even if something is an extended metaphor if it’s in that 1/8 it’s probably not really extended to any great lengths like it’s in part of your paper but it’s not in the whole paper what barnali has done here is she has wrapped her entire paper from beginning to end in this extended metaphor she does break some rules here and I’m going to point out the rules that she breaks but remember a sophisticated writer has earned the right to break some rules the way that you become respected for breaking the rules rather than reprimanded for breaking the rules is you do so in an artful way and I think you’ll see that barnali has definitely made those she’s definitely broken those rules in a masterful way so we can pat her on the back rather than put her down so here we go despite their relentless misguided assertion that they are the stronger sex men are actually very weak they don’t bear children their bodies don’t mount a full-out assault against them each month and most importantly they are not the ones that have to suffer beneath the agonising yoke of the patriarchy even though these are the facts of life women and our wonderful wisdom are burdened with pacifying the babies we’ve been placed on earth with okay in her hook she’s already so smoothly set up this metaphor now the other thing that I want you to notice about this metaphor is that she’s broken a rule I told you that for rhetorical analysis you should strictly stay in third person but you see here she’s using the Royal we but she’s doing it for effect so what I’m going to tell you is I want to see third person until we’ve made an agreement that you’re trying for that nine and you have earned the right to try for that nine she’s earned that right I definitely earned that right so she’s using it for artful effect here and it does work very well the other rule that barnali is breaking is she’s got this kind of condescending tone where she’s made this very strong assertion that women are actually the stronger Saxon and normally I would say okay we want to be you know gentle and kind we want to look at the opposition and all that kind of stuff but this first of all is not a synthesis and it’s not an argument ation um secondly she does this so well that again she gets away with it it’s unique and you usually can’t carry off this kind of tone unless you’re really good so she is really good so she’s able to do it English poet Elizabeth Barrett Browning swaddles are Napoleon La Petite I really like those words together because notice how she’s extending that metaphor the word swaddles is so good and then she’s really playing up that pun which she has turned into a pun because that means Napoleon is small so it’s really easy to compare him to a baby in her letter asking him to part in French writer Victor Hugo Napoleon La Petite exiled you go from the sandbox because Hugo refused to play the right way using flattery and imagery browning convinces Napoleon the small to stop throwing his tantrum and invite Hugo to play again because babies love shiny things Browning flashes these glittering words in front of Napoleon to occupy him look at how deathly she describes flattery she keeps extending that metaphor now applying it to like little flashy things that mothers flash in front of their babies the she twirls words like ah sire you are great enough and you can allow for the peculiarity of the poetical temperament before his eyes broaden goes on to ask him to disprove him by your generosity skillfully including another lustrous compliment in her petition Napoleon’s juvenile preoccupation with the ethereal niceties running a showering on him causes him to think that an action is inspired by him Brennan gives fresh meaning to the idiom all that glitters is not gold because although everything she is writing is dazzling she doesn’t truly mean any of it children are not able to detect sarcasm and effectively until age 8 so Napoleon Leppa teat still has a way to go so I hope you see the risk there she’s taking a basic psychological fact and she’s being bold in that she’s applying it to Napoleon lip petite like he is a child lower than 8 but basically what she’s really saying there is that even though Napoleon La Petite is an adult person he doesn’t have the mentality even of an eight-year-old dealing with infants can be very tiring and a surefire way to occupy them is to place him in front of moving pictures again look at how she works imagery in there it’s so smart browning employs is very visual tactic against our minuscule monarch I really love that alliteration there and how she’s using such good word choices she shows him that let no tear of an admirer a poetry drop upon your purple to establish that this issue is not even worse oiling his divine robe over she goes on to say and I am driven by an irresistible impulse to your Majesty’s feet browning asserts that even the most undesirable part of a person becomes a magnet because it belongs to Napoleon she knows that babies need this kind of attention the reason why one of the first things a baby can do is cry is because the baby needs to draw attention to himself since his communication is seriously lacking it’s only after hard-working years of development that we are able to understand what babies are saying pacifying children is not easy look at that incredible transition it again extends the metaphor and now we’re at the conclusion but using flattery and pretty pictures browning makes light work of it she tells Napoleon Leppa T what a good boy he is and lets him watch his favorite show the everlasting Emperor now notice how she just makes up a name of a show but that’s basically the impact these images would have a Napoleon not only does founding display mad streon writing but also an extensive understanding of child-rearing the fact that browning has to diminish her characteristics to get through to him shows that it doesn’t always promote development to speak plainly to a child I can say his hats off she’s done a great job and hopefully you see that really cool technique that she used and if you’re ready for it I would love to see some of you experiment with that technique Thanks

How to Write a Critical Analysis Essay

okay this is the third video on how to write an essay in each previous video we focused on a specific kind of essay and the first video is how to write a personal observation essay in the second video how to do a reader response essay in this video we’re gonna focus on how to write a critical analysis essay so let’s get started and all the previous videos I started by defining what that type of essay is no just because I’m using these terms critical analysis or critical analyses doesn’t mean it can’t be used a different way or it might mean something different but this is a kind of writing it might have a different name to explain the same thing basically this is an essay that uses a process of criticism to analyze something this is extremely common when it comes to an essay I’m calling it critical analyses specifically what I’m talking about this I’m talking about the the author of an essay is looking at something else that someone else has produced and is using criticized criticism to analyze it right you can find that and probably just about any kind of essay but we’re talking about one writing about something else in this case probably a written text okay so how do you actually write this kind of essay well I’m gonna point out four things one you’re gonna use a process of analysis just like I’ve said you are going to develop a thesis statement you’re gonna identify evidence to support that thesis and then you’re going to go through and write your argument no three of those steps should sound really familiar because there’s their what you do with just about any essay right so we’ll talk about it in the context of the critical analysis essay a lot of this is gonna sound like review because it is so let’s get started alright so when you’re writing a critical analysis essay you need to use a process to help you to go about criticizing the work whether it’s a movie it’s a poem it’s a short story it’s another essay a speech whatever it is you’re analyzing you using a process will help you to go through the steps to be effective to be logical and efficient and thorough right okay so you need to look at what the author’s claims are look at how or she presents those claims and go through all the different rhetorical strategies the methods that they use and then look at them for how effective they are I talked about this in the previous video on how to analyze an argument you can look back on that and that’ll help you to go through this process that I’m talking about having done that then you need to come to a reasoned decision yourself after you’ve done the work you’ve taken notes you’ve read critically you’ve analyzed the argument you come to a conclusion okay this is what I think about that great you need to be able to identify what your thesis statement is because you’re going to be presenting your thoughts to someone else and you need to be effective and efficient when you do it so you need to be able to identify a thesis after you’ve come to a conclusion you need to be able to take that thesis write it as a concise sentence that articulates your own claim about the source when you’ve done that then you like previous reader you’re making a promise that you need to keep and everything you say from that point on needs to justify that thesis that you’ve made so if you’re saying so-and-so’s essay is flawed because blah yetee and yeah then you need to be able to explain blog out again yeah to prove your point right or if you say it’s it’s you know what it’s a persuasive argument but it forgets this then you point that out or if you’re saying it’s a great argument because this whatever right you can analyze something critically without agreeing with it 100% or disagreeing with it 100% there could be a gray area you just need to be clear where you stand and be able to explain your point clearly and effectively so once you’ve done that you need to be able to identify the evidence that you’re going to use to support your thesis so what quotes summaries paraphrases from the text or maybe another source can you bring in to justify the point that you’re trying to make then you need to make sure that you’re using an effective process whether the other author did or didn’t that’s irrelevant because you can always be effective yourself right so because you’re trying to come at this from a place of authority you need to use a strong thorough effective process you are less persuasive when you just seem like you’re pointing out negative things but you’re not doing it in an organized way or if you’re not justifying it or using examples to back it up you just seem like you’re whiny and like why I don’t like this because no one’s gonna listen to you right but if you can say I do not agree with this or this is not effective because and you explain it it’s really hard to argue you can say you know we can agree to disagree I don’t agree with your interpretation but you cannot say someone didn’t think through it or they didn’t defend it if they did make sense so once you’ve done that you’ve you’ve thought about it critically you’ve come up with your argument you’ve found evidence to support it then you need to use everything you’ve come up with to defend it right so if you’ve written an outline to organize your thoughts do that if you’ve brought another sources great bring those in you need to just follow through and make sure as you write that you are trying to defend your thesis that you know what it is and that everything you say helps to prove that point while still being logical and avoiding logical fallacies yourself we need to be aware of when we what we promise and be able to deliver on those promises don’t make an argument that you cannot justify or that you cannot support or prove if you can’t then just be careful with your words make sure that you can follow through with whatever it is that you’re saying and remember you don’t have to say everything there could be said because each essay has to have a beginning and an end and it cannot talk about everything possible in the universe you have to narrow it down so it’s very simple in your thesis statement you you can follow it up with the sentence which is called a statement of methodology not important for now but basically where you explain what you will talk about what you won’t talk about so you stay focused and just make sure you don’t talk about anything else talk about what it what your point is and don’t get off-track just because you come up with a great sentence doesn’t mean ask to stay if it doesn’t help to prove your point that being said your point should be reasoned and it should be correct and accurate I in this class I’m not gonna make you argue a point that you don’t agree with though when you think about something rhetorically you understand that the argument and the person are not the same someone can say something that they don’t agree with or line wouldn’t be possible right and even though so hood believes it doesn’t make it true so we have to understand that someone’s thoughts and who they are are not the same and the same goes for you be able to look at things for what they are and not just for who’s saying them like we talked about in the previous video and make an effective clear efficient argument if you do that and you make sure that there’s no mistakes that’s all I can ask or any other teacher can really ask for so think about these steps as you go about writing your seized and if you have any questions ask me in the form below thank you for watching

writing 2,500 words in 4 HOURS! — Oxford Uni stress

hi there friends I don’t need judgment I don’t need anyone who’s watching this video to judge me because I know I’ve done wrong I know I’ve managed to might hang wrong I know this is my fault and I should have planned better but I didn’t I’m the student willed it okay look at this bed I usually came out of bed and started reading and working on this because I have an essay due and started it is probably right now but it was 1:30 so 138 which means we have approximately less than 5 hours to write 2500 words [Music] basically have 4 hours now because it’s over 130 we have 4 hours to write an essay on how helpful its focus work in the history of sexuality for understanding homoeroticism in classical Greece yeah Quinn see you guys later with a good run I’m kidding but we have to get this started ASAP and I have four hours I’ve done if I’m gonna make it I just don’t if I’m gonna make it I don’t even wanna make it anyways let’s get you into this because right now and by the way I have not brushed my teeth I haven’t showered this I got out of bed like this my head scarf is still on my head anyhow let’s go we can do this so the situation right now is 114 and we have nothing so great times fun times ok so the first thing that we need to do is to it sa plan and I know lots of you’re probably wondering why did you leave it so late why have you got 4 hours that did you not manage your time well oh these a bad student no basically we have an essay every like 6 days and you have to do to the 2,500 words but this week I was trying to focus on my dissertation as well and I just don’t know how to balance the two I put my hands up guys I don’t know how to balance the two and there was a for this essay 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 14 15 16 17 17 books on the recommended reading list 17 books and of course to have to be the whole book but they put big chapters on there like chapter 5 so probably has like 60 pages or something and like to do all of that in 6 days plus write essay plus make it good and like live breathe eat sleep repeat it’s difficult so anyways first step right now is I’m gonna make an essay plan because I think that’ll help me and hopefully by 2:00 p.m. will start right okay so it has been about 15 minutes and I finally got myself a detailed plan a lot of people always asked like how do you actually write an essay that quickly it’s not always good listen like last time my essays well oh that was so good like my teacher was always telling you my cup of tea this is getting better and better each week this time boy my essays have not been amazing then because I just don’t get the topic as much but I know that like after revising in the holidays and stuff I will understand it better but for right now I’m just like this is unfamiliar territory I’ve written three essays so far this term and the bin okay this is what I tend to do and it normally works but this time it’s not working but normally it does what I do is I’ve read throughout the week and I make my notes and this side so I make notes of everything I’m reading and like interesting points then what I’ll do is when I’m actually coming to write the essay I will make my detailed plan over here each paragraph is panned out but it’s got really chunky bits of my thoughts and stuff so when I’m coming to writing I’m actually just rewriting some of the things that I was writing throughout the week so my plan is so detailed that it’s kind of like the essay is kind of written and that’s why I can write it so quick because I wrapped my thoughts throughout the week and I make really detailed like notes and plans so when I’m writing I’m just making it like make more sense together if that makes sense but yeah too much talking it is currently talk let’s go we’re gonna start the first paragraph [Music] we are 19 minutes in 19 minutes because every single second counts and we have written the introduction so now it is time to launch into paragraph 1 [Music] okay guys so it’s now 3:00 p.m. so we’ve been working for one hour we have accomplished this so we have the first paragraph I mean the introduction and the first paragraph and the second paragraph under way and we have now written approximately 800 words so hi friends we have an update ahead sighs cries principal is in five crisis in yours it sa crisis and now we have reached one thousand word and it’s currently 340 now I am feeling very sleepy I’m tempted to just like taking that and like just aren’t and cry my worries away but I know that I can’t but I think I want to take my five-minute nap because if we reach a thousand words and it’s 3:40 it means that we have we don’t have enough time about the nap back at the desk I’ve written 1649 words and it’s currently 4:30 now I am genuinely like losing my mind so in fact my friends for a second while I just like get energy because I think EP and a lot of my friends already have an essay crisis as well so that’s actually let’s just go and check out what they’re doing and it’s them hello No are you done your Facebook when’s it due on Friday the ones on Thursday won’t you fight and I never realize the only week I don’t have a GT worn by monoi Wow well wow that was really sad Oh someone is doing an essay how’s it going okay so yeah as you can see from the girls they are also in like an epic races but they’re sleeping come on we can do this because if I sleep now I’ll never get back to doing this [Music] [Music] guys it is dark outside I’m losing my mind anyways so it’s now 5:00 p.m. 5:00 you guys can see this is 5:00 p.m. and we have where is it mm mm words so this is good it’s not the best but it’s good we have one hour left one hour left one hour left their friends because this God that I serve somehow I managed to finish doing that essay 2719 words in approximately 4 hours and I just feel like it’s currently 547 what I need to do now is read through this essay and Lord hope that it makes sense because we have approximately 15 minutes to 12 minutes do we do this and then send off to meet us here I’m [Music] and boom just like that it’s done we’ll press save save save and that’s gonna send it off thing is I feel so bad sending this off because I know that if I just had an Alan Moore to reread this it wouldn’t have as many mistakes as it has when it’s going out but at the end of the day there’s nothing I can do it’s gone it’s gone it’s gone and that is how you write 2700 words in four hours I mean wow and I can remember the entire essay like if you asked me to like a recite it now and tell you what my arguments were I could tell you like I actually understood what I was doing obviously we’ll see how it gets march tomorrow hopefully I can update you guys and tell you how it was taken whether it was a good essay or not but it’s done that’s all that matters so now it’s time to shower and get ready to like start doing other work because there’s more stuff Jude there’s always something jus so yeah welcome to [Music]